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Continuing our story based on Little Red.

We have now written the introductory paragraphs to our new story. 

We now need to develop what happens. 

We are now going to write up to the part where our main character goes on their journey.

Remember to look at your planning first, then talk through what is going to happen next, finally write the next part.

Here is an example:

Among the clouds of acrid smoke and the persistent rain, Gary saw the battered shell of a hover car. Not just any hover car but a sleek and beautifully designed one. As he approached, a number of figures stumbled out from the wreckage. They were both richly dressed and one was trying to hide the other from the gathering crowd. It became clear that this car belonged to somebody important. Why were they here in the undercity? The two figures hurried into the garage.

After a short time, Gary understood that this car belonged to the Emperor and his car had developed a technical fault. Gary and his uncle fixed the car as best they could and sent it on his way. 

That evening, Gary's uncle came to him with a package wrapped in a piece of greasy cloth.

"Take this to the top of the highest tower. Here is a pass for the express tube. Do not get out of the tube car or tell anyone where you are going. This mission is of the utmost importance. You must fix the Emperor's car properly."

Gary looked confused but his uncle spoke before Gary could begin to form any words.

" Remember - this is a very important mission. Do not leave the express tube until you reach your destination. There are too many enemies of the Emperor about."

With that, Gary was handed a small rucksack which he stuffed the package into and he stepped out into the darkness of the city. 

 

From this, we know why our main character is going on his mission. It is linked to the original story where he is warned not to stray from the path.

Good luck with your writing and remember to include some great sentence starters and if you are going to use speech, do not use too much of it. The speech in my example tells us quite a lot about why Gary needs to go and why he should keep to the path.


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